Feedback

After some further feedback, I had a little more refinement to do to make my narrative more clearer for the audience to interpret. I was suggested to avoid script/calligraphy fonts, instead to make my text appear like it was painted on the shack to further suggest that it was a dodgy business. I also need to add more cheese on display so it looked more like a shop. The factory looked like a power plant opposed to a factory, so I was suggested to look at some picture examples and refine it. It was also recommended that I change the colour of the money bag to a beige/brown colour with possibly money spewing out of it as it is easier to interpret by others.